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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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Cool cool.
Character information
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Alright this is definitely an improvement as far as things go and I like how she sounds. My only real issue here is try not to put too much into her personality. It's easy to underdo it and overdo it youve just gotta find a balance of sorts. Putting everything into one character makes it seem almost indecisive and that you want the character to be more then they are.
Relationships
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These are fine, but like last time just develop them further and add more to them so they feel fleshed out.
Backstory
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This Backstory has improved quite a bit, but I recommend adding more happy points to her childhood. Whilst it makes sense for her to end up where she does from this story, she must have had some happiness moment in her past with her mother. So maybe think about that a bit.
Other
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No issues here but if she's good at combat, make sure there's some training behind it.
Stats
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Stats are balanced so there's no issues here.
Final thoughts I think that you've made this character a lot better then she was, but she still has a couple of things that can be improved upon to make her better, so just focus on them. Apart from that, good job.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
