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Cool, I'll get that right this time aha. Still sorry for mixing up the universes last time oof.
Character information
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Okay most of this works although there are a few contradictions in the appearence but I get what you mean so that's fine. Regarding her personality, angry characters are hard to write well so be careful with that since you have to show that she is indeed angry. Also maybe add a couple of other negative traits because mostly everything else is pretty positive and we're going for a balanced character.
The thing with her name is pretty cool in my opinion, however I've never seen anyone manage to do that with the last name Scott, because it's actually pretty common. So if you want to do something like that, maybe give her a more unusual name.
Relationships
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These are fine just be sure to develop them further and add to her character using these.
Also that name thing still applies but the pet name is cute.
Backstory
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This works for the most part but the bullying because if her accent thing shouldn't be too persistent because whilst kids will dig and tease a bit, I don't think I've really met people that actually want to do damage because of a way someone sounds. Those are a lot of traits to have by age 13, be careful with that because you want to give her room to develop over the story.
Other
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This works here, so no issues here.
Stats
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Like last time, this stats are pretty high. Fives should be balanced with ones and I only ever recommend one of those anyway. Fours should normally be blanaces with twos. Balance in characters is important. When having a character this young who also develops through the story, I suggest having Stats lower so there's room for the character to grow.
Final thoughts Overall, this character is pretty decent but just work on a couple of key things and make her a bit more well rounded and she should be pretty good.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
