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Cover: Absolutely LOVE this cover- beautiful. The only thing I would adapt- if possible- would be the color of the font. At the moment it is really light and frankly quite hard to see, I would just darken the font the slightest amount. Then, the cover would be perfect.

Blurb: A solid blurb that tells me everything I need to know. I would just refine it a bit, make it more interesting to the reader. I will do this for you.

YOURS

Not everything is what it seems.

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When Camellia De León receives a scholarship for the prestigious Lunacrest Girls Academy, she can't help but be over the moon. She expects to live out her final two years of high school in full bliss, meeting like-minded friends and colleagues. On her first day there she meets a small and beautiful girl, Angel. Her name seems to emphasize everything she embodies-being one of the most perfect and brightest students on campus.However, Angel has a secret. A secret Camellia wishes she'd never discovered.

ADAPTATIONS

Everything is not always the way it seems.

Camellia De León was a (insert age and occupation. Then talk a bit about her.) FOR EXAMPLE: 

Camellia De León was a 17-year-old college student with poor attendance and an underwhelming collection of grades.

So when she received a scholarship for the prestigious Lunacrest Girls Academy, she couldn't help but be over the moon. Expecting to live out her final two years of high school in full bliss, she attempted to meet like-minded friends and colleagues. 

On her first day, she earns just that. A friend. A small and beautiful girl with the name Angel. Her name seemed to emphasize everything she embodied- being one of the most bright and perfect students on campus. 

Through this shell of confidence though, lies a secret deep within Angel. 

A secret Camellia wished she'd never discovered.

Originality: Lovely story and very original- LOVE this idea. Great work here!

Flow: The story seems to flow very well. I love the way you started the whole story, with a letter- it really is hooking. Your grammar, paragraphing, and vocabulary are spot on, I really have no comments here. I could only say that you could find more things to talk about. It is almost as if you point out something, talk about it for a second, and return to speech. Maybe tr exploring what camellia sees/feels a bit more? It helps with character development. If I were you, I would think of re-writing the start of the chapter- more or less adding to it really. I personally think it would be nice to explore camellia writing the letter. We could talk about her emotions as she writes the letter- or we could see her post it? Otherwise, great work!

Chapter size: They fluctuate from 7-6 minutes. This works perfectly with your story- no changes needed here. Keep up the good work.

Basics: I wouldn't say you have to work on anything specific as everything in your story is great at the moment! This was a lovely read. I would try and work on the story as a whole, just seeing what works for you.