Book Reviews

7 ᴅᴀʏꜱ ᴀɴᴅ ꜱᴇᴠᴇɴ ʀᴇᴀꜱᴏɴꜱ

Cover: Right off the bat, I can tell that you are a font user- you use fonts for anything and everything haha. This is lovely to me, but some people may struggle to read it- e.g. dyslexic people. (This is unrelated to the cover by the way).

About the cover:

I honestly love it. I wouldn't make any changes. I think the colors are beautiful and everything works really well. The only problem I would have is that it doesn't tell me much about the story- but it's fine if that is what you are going for. I think it is lovely overall, but I might move the text at the top and bottom closer to the edges. So, move the 'written by Naomi' further down.

Blurb: The blurb is okay, but I would make adaptations in the structure and a few words.. I personally wouldn't use fonts here as it can be hard to understand as I stated earlier. Usually, I don't like the first person blurb thing, but in your case, I love it. The blurb is really interesting actually, and tells me everything I need to know.

YOURS 

𝑰 𝒘𝒂𝒏𝒕 𝒕𝒐 𝒃𝒆 𝒕𝒉𝒆 𝑨𝒕𝒍𝒂𝒔 𝒘𝒉𝒐 𝒖𝒔𝒆𝒅 𝒕𝒐 𝒄𝒐𝒎𝒇𝒐𝒓𝒕 𝒉𝒆𝒓 𝒂𝒏𝒅 𝒕𝒆𝒍𝒍 𝒉𝒆𝒓 𝒕𝒉𝒂𝒕 𝒆𝒗𝒆𝒓𝒚𝒕𝒉𝒊𝒏𝒈 𝒘𝒊𝒍𝒍 𝒃𝒆 𝒐𝒌𝒂𝒚.

𝑩𝒖𝒕 𝑰 𝒅𝒐𝒏'𝒕. 𝑨𝒏𝒅 𝑰 𝒄𝒂𝒏'𝒕.

𝑩𝒆𝒄𝒂𝒖𝒔𝒆 𝒆𝒗𝒆𝒓𝒚𝒕𝒉𝒊𝒏𝒈 𝒘𝒐𝒏'𝒕 𝒃𝒆 𝒐𝒌𝒂𝒚.

7 days left of her life.

7 reasons why she loves me.

"𝑭𝒐𝒓 𝒕𝒉𝒆 𝒏𝒆𝒙𝒕 𝒔𝒆𝒗𝒆𝒏 𝒅𝒂𝒚𝒔, 𝑰'𝒎 𝒈𝒐𝒊𝒏𝒈 𝒕𝒐 𝒈𝒊𝒗𝒆 𝒚𝒐𝒖 𝒐𝒏𝒆 𝒓𝒆𝒂𝒔𝒐𝒏 𝒘𝒉𝒚 𝑰 𝒍𝒐𝒗𝒆 𝒚𝒐𝒖," 𝒔𝒉𝒆 𝒓𝒖𝒇𝒇𝒍𝒆𝒔 𝒎𝒚 𝒉𝒂𝒊𝒓."𝑹𝒆𝒂𝒔𝒐𝒏 𝒐𝒏𝒆," 𝒔𝒉𝒆 𝒉𝒂𝒏𝒅𝒔 𝒎𝒆 𝒕𝒉𝒆 𝒑𝒊𝒆𝒄𝒆 𝒐𝒇 𝒑𝒂𝒑𝒆𝒓.

How will Atlas and Starr spend their last days together before everything's lost forever? But "forever" has an endless amount of different meanings...

𝑰 𝒍𝒊𝒗𝒆𝒅 𝒇𝒐𝒓 𝑺𝒕𝒂𝒓𝒓. 𝑰 𝒍𝒊𝒗𝒆 𝒇𝒐𝒓 𝑺𝒕𝒂𝒓𝒓. 𝑰'𝒍𝒍 𝒍𝒊𝒗𝒆 𝒇𝒐𝒓 𝑺𝒕𝒂𝒓𝒓.

─── ･ ｡ﾟ☆: *.☽ .* :☆ﾟ. ───

ADAPTATIONS

7 days left of her life.

7 reasons why she loves me.

─── ･ ｡ﾟ☆: *.☽ .* :☆ﾟ. ───

I want to be the Atlas who used to comfort her and ensure her that everything would be okay.

But I don't. I can't.

Because everything won't be okay.

''For the next seven days, I am going to give you one reason why I love you'', she ruffles my hair. ''Reason one,'' she smiles, before handing me a piece of paper.

How will Atlas and Starr spend their last days together before everything is lost forever? 

It seems like "forever" has an endless amount of different meanings...

I lived for Starr. I live for Starr. I will live for Starr.

─── ･ ｡ﾟ☆: *.☽ .* :☆ﾟ. ───

Originality: I love this story, I think it is very unique. I would, however, suggest that the plot is similar to 'Thirteen reasons why', minus the s**cide. If you don't know what happens, basically a girl k*lls herself, and gives people tapes each day of why she did it. Obviously, this is a totally different idea from yours, this is just the vibe I get from it.

Flow: Wow, your story is so emotional and raw, I love it! Honestly didn't expect a twist right at the beginning. Everything flows really well, but I would work on that first chapter. I think you reveal too early what Starr has, and there should be another chapter before it- it just feels too soon. Typically, we like to develop relationships with the characters in our books, and you don't give us the chance to do that. I find myself not really understanding/ caring much about Starr, so the shock doesn't work as much. There are much better ways to drop something on the reader like that. I would just work on developing that connection first.

As for the flow, your writing is actually really good, and everything seems fine to me- minus a few minor grammar mistakes that can be solved easily. I would work on paragraphing a bit more, as you seem to change one almost every sentence. Combine events more, or just expand on your descriptions to make sentences last longer.

My final point would be starting each paragraph. You seem to start with 'I' a lot, which becomes very repetitive. This can be solved easily.

FOR EXAMPLE:

I ran down the stairs to grab my water bottle.

Running down the stairs, I swing my arm down the banister carelessly, not focusing on where I am heading. Raising my arm, I slide- with ease- down the remaining wood, and land perfectly on the hardwood floor. Swiftly, I scoop the blue water bottle from the floor and turn towards the door.

See, and easy fix, and this will also help with developing your paragraphs.

Chapter size: There are only 2 chapters, 6 and 8 minutes long. I think this works perfectly with your story, and wouldn't make any changes here!! Perfect.

Basics: Overall, a really interesting start. Keep up the good work!