Cover: Love this cover!! Due to the picture being so dark, it is hard to make out what it is a photo of. To fix this problem, I would just move the title down so it is central, or under the girl's chin. I have no other comments; the cover is great!
Blurb: The blurb is good, but I would just expand it a little and make the structure slightly better. The differences will only be minor as your blurb is very good already!
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(BOOK 1) At the age of 17, Flair Manon is unlike most girls her age. Instead of dresses and tea parties, she dreams of acquiring the title of warrior. A title granted only to the greatest fighters in the Kingdom of Celion.
However, she has much to learn before she can get any closer to her goal, especially, with the whole universe conspiring to thwart her at every turn. Will she be able to remain true to herself in this journey of adventure, betrayal, and friendship!
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(BOOK 1)
At the age of 17, Flair Manon is unlike most other girls. Instead of dresses and tea parties, she dreams of acquiring the title of Warrior- a title granted only to the greatest fighters in the Kingdom of Celion.
Flair has much to learn before she can get any closer to her goal, especially with the whole universe conspiring to thwart her at every turn. Will she be able to remain true to herself in this journey of adventure, betrayal, and friendship?
Originality: As I have said in previous reviews, I don't usually read fantasy books, so I am uncertain on whether your ideas are original or not. To me, I don't think I have seen anything like this before. I do like this plot so far!
Flow: You have a really lovely writing style. Your paragraphing is great, though some are very long compared to the others. My only problem is your speech. It is good, but you fail to put who is saying what at most points. This makes it quite tricky to read and keep up with characters. This is my only critique.
Chapter size: Ranging from around 4-9 minutes. I would focus on keeping this more towards the 8+ minute mark, as these longer chapters seem to be your best work. However, your 6 minute chapters are great as well. I would recommend not going under 6 minutes unless it is for the effect of the reader. I would stick to longer chapters to provide for a better read!!
Basics: You asked for me to read the last few chapters so I did. Obviously, this means I am lacking knowledge from the beginning. The plot was very interesting, however, even though I didn't start from the beginning! From what I have read, the story is great, and you are a very talented writer. Keep up the amazing work!
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