Book Reviews

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Cover: Lovely cover but VERY overused. I feel as though I have seen this cover 10,000 times over- even though I haven't. This is a very specific format for a specific brand of book. In my school, we would read books with this exact cover daily. To me, this isn't the kind of book anyone would want to pick up just from bad experience at school haha. I would really recommend changing everything about this cover as it is so overused and most people will just scroll past and think this is a translation of some Greek mythology or something. I do really REALLY love the cover, but it just gives me the vibe that most people will skip past it.

Blurb: Slightly confusing at first, but tells me everything I need to know. Minor changes needed but not necessary.

YOURS 

Set in ancient Rome, young Lucretia aspires to join the ranks of the Vestal Virgins. Sworn to a life of chastity and independence from a male guardianship is her objective.Gaius comes to terms with his life as a former soldier. Yet, his authoritative father plagues him. Everything changes when Lucretia is forced to marry vile Gaius. His dominating cruelty pushes her away from him and her disobedience vexes him. Yet, an unimaginable connection disarms Gaius and even Lucretia can't deny their irresistible attraction.A perpetual fight between anguish & affection.

ADAPTATIONS

In Ancient Rome, 9AD, young Lucretia aspires to join the familiar ranks of the Vestal Virgins. Her main objective is to be sworn to a life of chastity and independence from male guardianship.

Gaius, a former soldier, comes to terms with his experiences in his early life. Yet, his authoritative father plagues him consistently. 

Everything soon changes when Lucretia is forcibly thrown into vile Gauis's arms. They are to be wed. His dominating cruelty pushes her away from him, and her disobedience vexes him. An unimaginable connection soon disarms Gauis, and even Lucretia can't deny her irresistible attraction to him.

A perpetual fight between Anguish & Affection.

Originality: I would never read anything like this usually, so I can't tell you if it is original. I will say it is original though, and I really enjoyed the parts I read. Your story is very interesting.

Flow: Your paragraphing is great, and the structure is amazing. I LOVE your writing style and your vocabulary is amazing. A few of the words aren't as common, which really fits with the 6-9AD vibe you are going with. I love it, your writing is so professional. Nothing else to say here, amazing!

Chapter size: You started on 12 minutes, then dipped to 8-9 minutes, and shot back up to 13 in the last. Honestly, I think this works really well with your storyline, but I would aim to keep them in that range and no further. About 8-12 range is perfect.

Basics: Wow, you have a lot of skill. You are clearly very passionate about writing. Either that or you have amazing vocabulary naturally. Super skilled and an amazing read. I am not going to lie when I say I was dreading reading your story. I saw the cover and thought it was going to be a bad copy of an ancient Rome text. But it wasn't, your storyline was amazing and your writing capability was so strong. The only problem is THE COVER. As I already stated, I do love the cover and it is BEAUTIFUL. But it is misleading. I think you can portray what your story is about in a much better way. Amazing story, just the cover is my only problem!