Cover: You told me to ignore it as you have the new one coming hehe.
Blurb: Okay, so you have no blurb... I would put a blurb in and take all of what you have away. I don't really know what to comment on as there is no content for me to assess.
Originality: I didn't really understand what your story was about as there literally is no blurb. I couldn't even guess what it was about. Even after reading, I am still a little confused about what the story is about. This all comes down to the no blurb factor. Put a blurb in and everything will make sense!!
Flow: I always find the second-person view weird to read, as I am the character. However, this is just my feeling, and it is your book! I am NOT saying there is a problem with it, just putting my view out there.
You use the middle section text button on Wattpad. Honestly, I don't know why it exists, as I really don't like it. To make your story look more professional, I would definitely make it so it is normal again.
So instead of writing in the middle like this,
move your text so it is at this side. I just think this looks much cleaner, and is honestly easier to read.
Honestly, I don't have much to say about your work. Everything looks good to me. There are minimal mistakes and wow. You are a terrific writer!! Great vocabulary and your paragraphing are spectacular, very professional. I would just change the middle text thing and it will be perfect.
Chapter size: Okay, wow. Your chapters range from 19 minutes to 32. I would definitely try to shorten these down. The 19 is acceptable, but I would definitely split the next two in half. It is a really enormous chunk of material for someone to read, and can become quite tricky for readers. Also, it is all such great content; it deserves to have its own chapters. As a rule of thumb, try to keep chaps from 3000 to 5000 words! Try to change chapters on new subjects too- like a time skip to the next day.
I really don't have much to say. Get a new cover as most people won't click on a book for the bad cover it has- your book has too good writing to not be read. GET A COVER AND SHOW OFF, YOU ARE AMAZING! Get a blurb, and your story will be perfect <33
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