Book Reviews

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Cover: I really like this cover, but I think it could be adapted to something even better!! If you wanted to keep the cover the same I would: make the picture more central, so the ride is central to the writing, as, at this point, it is too far to the right. I think the fonts are nice, but could use some work in my opinion. If you wanted to change your cover, I would: In your tags, you state the book is a thriller, and the fonts at the moment give me romance vibes, almost child-like in a way. I think if you use a picture of a fair at night/scarier, it would be more interesting too!!

Blurb: I quite like your blurb, it is very interesting, and tells me everything I need to know. I would just make the structure and wording a little better!

YOURS

Avika, a fifteen year old, runs away at the night. No, not because of her family, or was wronged or blah blah blah. . .

She ran because she wanted to attend the Night Fair. The catch? People who had visited it before her said it was just an amazing experience, but never shared the details. No person who ever visited The Night Fair has ever shared a small detail about it. But if its so risky why would Avika want to visit it?The night fair is held once in every five years. The plan is simple, sneak out, visit it, get the item, come back. 

Getting involved in centuries old feud, bloodthirsty ghost and time ticking bomb fairies wasn't her plan. So will she adapt to the new plan or end up being a sacrifice?

CHANGES

Avika, a fifteen year old girl, breaks away in the night. No, not for any normal reason. Not at all.

She ran because she wanted to attend The Night Fair. The catch? All that visited before Avika described it as an incredible experience, but never shared their deeper thoughts. The night fair was held once in every five years, a once in a lifetime event. No individual person that visited The Night Fair leaked a word about it. But if it's so risky, why would Avika want to visit it?

The plan for Avika was simple: sneak out, visit the fair, retrieve the item, and come back. 

But systems never work out that way. Getting herself involved in a century-old fued, bloodthirsty ghosts and ticking bomb fairies, Avika finds herself in the middle of something she isn't supposed to be in. Will she manage to adapt to the new plan, or become a sacrifice to the Gods?

Originality: I have never read anything quite like this, and love the idea honestly. I think it is a very interesting concept!!

Flow: Your paragraphing is great, I would say they are the perfect size for Wattpad. On the other hand, there are very few of them. 7-ish paragraphs is not enough in my opinion, I would work on increasing the amount. Aside from that, I see no other problems. Your grammar is spectacular, and your clarity is amazing! This book is really good!

Chapter size: Your chapters are about 2-4 minutes at the moment. I would seriously recommend stretching the chapters a bit. You can easily do this by adding more description into each paragraph. Or just describe everything that happens. For example: Say Avika was to walk somewhere- You would write about her steps, what she can see, what she can smell, and so on and so forth. It is just a repeated pattern. I would aim for 6-7 minutes.

Basics: I don't really have anything to say, everything was good!! Lovely read, cannot wait for future uploads!! Keep doing what you are doing <3