Book Reviews

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Cover: The cover is obviously just a photo of someone's back.  This is clearly unprofessional- as in, it wouldn't be published in a shop- however all of your published books have this style. I would just recommend putting a title over top of it so it looks a bit better. You can do this using Canva or Visme depending on what effect you would like. It is really simple and will make a sizeable difference!!

Blurb: There is really nothing to say as you only have a quote in your blurb area. However, I do like the quote choice, and it is very interesting. Focusing purely on the cover and the blurb, there is actually nothing to learn about the book, so I would recommend inserting something into either to give us a hint. I don't know if this was the purpose, but the 3 word blurb does make me want to read- just to find out what will happen. I will say, not that many people will take this as something that intrigues them, so they won't click on your book as they have no idea what it is about. In your second chapter, you have a bit more of a description. I would add this to the blurb.

Originality: The story seems original enough to me, but I am still totally confused about the plot.

Flow: I am sorry to say this, but I dislike your writing style. You appear to use dashes to insert the cations of the characters like:

- Looks to see the front door open

I have no idea why you are doing this, as you don't do it for every action. It is confusing. When you are using a character that doesn't speak proper English- like slang terms or an accent. you have to put an accent on certain words. Also, you don't use a single bit of grammar other than on the speech marks. For the speech you do this:

'' INSERT SPEECH ''

You shouldn't have a gap.

''INSERT SPEECH''

Changing this will make everything work a lot better.

There are really no points of actual events. Your whole story is just people talking back and forth, and the occasional walking or activity of some sort. I would recommend going through my other reviews for people, and looking at the quality of writing for theirs. You really need to work on descriptive writing. You should be describing characters' actions. Other things need to happen rather than speech.

Chapter size: you clearly are on track and are focusing on your chapter sizes as they are all the same at 5 minutes. This works great, but I would bump them up to 8 minutes- I think this would make the story more interesting as there is more content. Overall, you can do this by extending your descriptive writing, so basically wrote about everything the character does/says.

Basics: I find it really hard to judge my likeability for the story as it is lacking so much. I think you really need to spend some time working on the quality of your writing. I would REALLY recommend reading my past reviews and seeing examples I give on there. Give it some hard work and you will get there eventually!!