Title; Don't Act Like You Forgot
Author; @hayleyautumns
What is 'Don't Act Like You Forgot?'
-it's a completed horror story fit for all horror readers!
Rating-
7/10
EBI-
You need to pick a tense and stick with it. You are constantly changing from present to past, and some of your sentences don't make sense. Your storyline is perfect, you just need to be clearer on the point you're trying to get across. The characters need to be a little clearer too- some times I'm not sure on who's speaking.
Review-
The plot is very interested and carefully structured- there is always a completely fascinating and terrifying turn of events, however the typos do tend to draw away some focus here and there. Although the story is a horror and some of the things that happen are seriously graphic, the way you write makes it all completely believable! Your writing is very naturalistic, and the only thing that lets it down as a whole is not having a set tense (because at times it becomes confusing) and the typos- but if you were to run through and edit, it would be a stunning 10/10
Do I recommend this story?
-Of course!
If you love horrific scenes involving psychos and socios, accompanied by eerily sensational events and characters, this is a story for you!
Fancy checking it out? Here's the link;
https://www.wattpad.com/story/52065662-don't-act-like-you-forgot-justwriteit