@CandleUnderground The evergreens are filled with mist as we break up camp. So close to the lake, but not a single one of us can spot the water or hear the waves through the muffling effects of fog. Our lanterns only seem to make the effect stronger, but we fear to close their shutters and lose the identifying glow of our companions.
The road is difficult to follow. Occasionally there seems to be an extra lantern in our midst. Or are we simply confused? Then Frost takes a step and sploonk! Their foot sinks to the ankle in the icy water.
Let's not take chances. This mist may be beautiful, entrancing even, but with water so near and the air still so frigid, it's best to wait out the fog.
While we search for nearby firewood and set up camp, lets take a look at Rex, with Azarias Drake.
Chapters 12 and 13 for Cipher:
12- Does this section need more strategy to fit with Azarias' character?
13- How is the action?
And for the rest, Chapters 14 and 15: Have the scenes been clear enough, do they transition and flow well?
Is the action sufficient? Too much/ Feels about right?
And for Ann, with a new work! She’d love it if we could take a look at her ONC project: Heart of Sparrow on Wattpad
1. Does the opening of chapter 1 feel weak? Would it serve the story better to start with the setting?
2. Does Sparrow’s motivation for being at Mr. Russo’s workplace seem justified by chapter 2?
3. Overall thoughts in general are very welcome!
Cipher you're up next week!
We hope this finds you all well. 💖
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