[Closed] Warrior Cat OC Ratings

Cobrastrike

This OC belongs to Euphoria_460  

Name┃Cobrastrike; Cobrapaw; Cobrakit

Very original, I like it a lot! 5/5

Age┃ (At death) 60 moons

Ok!

Gender┃ Male

Great! There aren't a lot of male OCs.

Personality┃Because of the way he was raised, Cobrastrike comes off as cold to every cat he meets, but if you become his friend, he's super nice. He's really mean towards cats who are mean towards his friends, but if you insult him, most of the time, he'll just shake it off. It's mainly insulting his friends/family that makes him angry.

25/25 I like this a lot! I've been trying to figure out a way to criticize it, but I keep coming up blank. He seems well-balanced, and he's aptly flawed. 

Appearance┃He is a cat with gray, dark gray, cream, brown, and white fur, all kind of mixed together. He has some black markings on his face along with a pair of yellow-green eyes.

6/10 You don't have to change it, but it sounds like he's a tortoiseshell! (Which is, actually my favorite cat coloration lol, but that's besides the point.) Male tortoiseshells are incredibly rare, and usually sterile, so make sure to take that into account. On the yellow-green eyes, though- thank you so much, that is perfect and realistic.

Clan┃FireClan

Oh, awesome! I love original clans. 

Rank┃Warrior

Great! Which reminds me.... really should've add rank on the form. This is great though, so many become leader/deputy/medicine cat. It's refreshing.

Mother┃Viperfang (long furred gray-and-white she-cat with blue eyes)

Great name!

Father┃Falconclaw (gray tom with cream splotches and a torn ear; green-yellow eyes)

Cobrastrike seems genetically possible, which is great!

Sibling┃Silverkit (gray she-kit with cream splotches and blue eyes; dead)

Poor Silverkit. This is warrior cats, so it doesn't matter all too much, but just so you know cats have to have quite a bit of white fur to have blue eyes. But that's my only criticism here!14/15 Overall really good!

Likes┃Fighting and hunting

Alright! (Note: I'm probably about to look way too far into this.) It fits him. He seems like he'd find solace in it, given the harshness of life around him. It's his reprieve. He can probably just focus and block everything else out.

Dislikes┃Cats being mean to him or cats he's fond of (friends and family)

Makes sense! To be fair, who does like that? I can see how it would get to him, though. This poor tom really needs a friend.

Backstory┃Cobrastrike was born in FireClan to Viperfang, only to find that his littermate, Silverkit, and father, Falconclaw, was dead. He was also a descendant of Fireclaw, the founder of FireClan, who had done some terrible things, and looked scarily similar to how Fireclaw was described. His Clanmates always looked at him with disgust in their eyes (they rejected Fireclaw also, even though he was the founder), and was mean to him. All those, he could shake off. The only thing that he couldn't let go was when they said mean things about Viperfang, which was quite frequently. One day, Viperfang was attacked during a hunting patrol, and none of her Clanmates bothered to save her because she, too, was Fireclaw's descendant, and Cobrastrike wasn't there. Furious, the tom battled the cat who could've saved Viperfang but chose not to. (1/2)

That's so sad! Poor Viperfang. Now Cobrastrike has no family. The only bit of criticism I could find in here is how long ago was FireClan founded? It has to be fairly recently, since they all know Fireclaw's appearance, unless there's been some dark forest/dark forest equivalent visits. It does make sense that they wouldn't risk their lives to save someone they deemed 'worthless', but, my goodness, please FireClan! Stop being so shallow, what have these poor cats ever done to you?

The leader, who had been looking for him to show any signs of violence, exiled him instantly. Wanting revenge, he joined the rogues and slowly rose to the rank of leader. He made a plan for revenge, and led the rogues to attack the Clans, but died there.

The exile makes sense, although I'd imagine Cobrastrike would leave regardless. They'd probably been on edge for a long time, and had made up evil Cobrastrike/Viperfang in their heads. Sort of cheering him on with the revenge plot. Usually that's a rather cliché villain thing to do, but he's not a villain and it makes perfect sense here. It's a nice twist on it! 

Another really interesting bit. (I actually have a character like this myself, love when I see it.) They created a self-fulfilling prophecy. They thought he'd certainly be evil and destroy their clan. And he tried (the latter, not the former). BUT, if they hadn't believed that, the thought would never have crossed his mind. A perfect 25/25 from me.

Overall, Cobrastrike is a really great character. I love so much about him, he's well-written for sure. Please tell me if you ever write a story using him, I'd love to read it!

Also, I tried my best to be harsh! Hopefully this review helps you, and thanks so much for submitting him.