Kings Obsession

Kings Obsession

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DarkDragonRider By DarkDragonRider Updated 2 days ago

James is a heartless king of a big kingdom, he murdered his parents at the age of 12 so he could take over the throne. he is cruel, cold-hearted and did not care for his people. until one day when he leads an attack on a village that failed to pay there bills he comes across a girl and instantly becomes love obsessed with her.


Alice is a farm girl who lives with her parents in a small village. she lives a happy life until the king attacks her village and she is captured and taken to the kings castle and is forced to become the kings personal servant.

Ok, hi, I like the story idea, I think it's awesome!
                              Please don't take this the wrong way, I'm only trying to help, but you are using the wrong 'there' in most of your sentences.  It's supposed to be 'their'.  thanks for listening!
Vicky3495 Vicky3495 Nov 10
Hey I know your story is not edited, but I think you've got potential, it's just a shame that you have small mistakes like this, it's quite the big repetition :/. Try to find an editor and I'm sure that your story will be a massive success :)