Tala is just a regular home schooled girl living with her brother in the middle of no where.Until her 18th birthday rolls around and she gets sick and Some Weird Random Guys Show up.What is going on????
Wow, that's really not considered huge... That's almost average, maybe even a little shorter...
You know...I like knowing 5'4-5'5 is average height for a girl. You guys just made me more insecure about my height.
I'm 5'0 and 5'8 is huge compared to me.
OK I am so sorry but what threw me off is her hair okay I hget it and all bout I would prefer her to at least not spike it up like a dude if she left it down it would be OK but that just throws it off😡
etc she hates the Disney channel. there is something wrong with her
OK im only here not to give you hate but constructive criticism. your writing could use ALOT of work. incomplete thoughts. unneeded material, and better dialogue. I am a editor and a author and am only her to help you.
You don't need to give all the information about your character straight away. You can give some away like her dislike and likes when talking to somebody else- a new character etc.
Other than that, you're stories pretty decent