BOOK SUGGESTIONS/ CRITICIZE FOR FREE! II

Skyrim: The eagles call

Hello 12thedata12!

(I like your username, it's cool. :D Just thought I'd mention that!)

You seem to have punctuation issues, such as putting periods in places they shouldn't be, such as the middle of a sentence.

Example:

"[...] nagging me to play it so.I downloaded [...]" (The initial download).

See what I mean?

Can you please write a note in the beginning of the book to say that one must know about Skyrim fairly well/should have played it to understand the book? I know very little of Skyrim, so it's very difficult for me to follow. :(

Apart from the fact that I was pretty confused, the story really needs to get corrected in terms of punctuation! The grammar also needs review.

I'm sure all the Skyrim fans of Wattpad are enjoying/enjoyed this book!

~Julian

Date: 26 June 2014