Hello!
This is nice! I like how at the beginning everybody's (readers) are confused... but so is the character!
We can seriously relate to her. It's cool. Nice punctuation, vocab...
Nothing really to critique on, just compliment and say CONTINUE writing!
IT HATH POTENTIAL. :)
xox,
Julian
Date: 24 June 2014
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