Hey there :)
Right off the bat, I'm the kind of person that feels sad when the body guards in action movies are killed, because they had a story, a life... but we only care about the main characters, right? But here we are, with a different side to the Hunger Games--not all the villains are true evil... right?
This story addresses just that! It's fantastic, as Glimmer stands in the shadow of Glitter. Very smart!
As for errors, only a few typos/misspelled words, like "nusense" is "nuisance" (Chapter 2). "Amuzed" > "amused" (on Chapter 4, page 2). They're so tiny I think it's a safe bet to hit "edit" and to click on the "spell checker" (the "ABC" with a checkmark) and you'll catch those little mistakes. You can turn it off if you don't like it.
Overall I like how you introduced a different side to the Hunger Games, getting into the mentality of a tribute. You really got my heart going, giving me feels--and then it all ended. Please write more!
xox,
Julian
Date: 24 June 2014
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