Girl can I get a witness... ;)

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Well then!

I'm going to say that there's not much to be corrected: just a few simple corrections "ill" is "I'll" and a couple punctuation issues, other than that, you're good!

Keep writing.

~Julian

Date: 23 June 2014

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