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Villains Don't Get Happy Endings (Review Thirty-Nine)

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Villains Don't Get Happy Endings
By: Celine107_

Reviewer: SilentLover0224

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Title/Cover: 10/10

- Very mysterious but definitely intriguing.

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Blurb: 7/10

- A bit confusing as it repeats, but again, it hooks readers interest.

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First Chapter: 10/10

- Very well written! So much detail and a touch of suspense. Especially when she jumped off the cliff.

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Grammar/Punctuation: 9/10

- Some minor mistakes, but overall, really good.

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Vocabulary: 8/10

- Plain and words, but were used creatively.

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Plot/Pacing: 9/10

- Although you can find the difficult and confusing pace intimidating, I still find it a bit easy to follow.

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Character/Character Development: 8/10

- Some of the characters are hard to gauge and some could use a background chapter prior to the story. Maybe you could explain why Adria and that one man have so many problems.

Originality: 10/10

- Very creative and well thought out.

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World Building: 10/10

- Each word was used correctly, and very creatively.

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Imagery: 9/10

- You used so many descriptions, and the book was easy to follow. I would say do less telling, for example: "Her hands were white as snow, and her cheeks were red." Instead you can say: "She was in shock from the cold, her hands warped in numbness."

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