Dear EmilyCharlotteCooledge,
I'll be honest... this book was hard to critique. :)
The style of your writing is so clear and easy-to-read that I truly had trouble trying to find anything that needs editing. The pace is fantastic and I like the vocabulary. You're also very consistent in grammar and punctuation.
I think the only major edit is the description--it's very long! Try to make it shorter.
Wow wow wow!!
At the first chapter, I had become super nervous, and I already felt super attached to this child! The description is just too good. It's addicting to read.
Awesome job!
~J
Date: 15 December 2014