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Finding Them
By: savvysoul_37
Reviewer: The_Scarlet_Writer
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Cover/title: 9/10
- At first glance, the title is interesting; it kind of gives off some mysterious vibes.
- I think the cover is really pretty, very aesthetic too.
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Blurb: 8/10
- I think it's nice and it made me curious to find out more about Ira.
- Although, I think you've got a little typing mistake in there: "is in love with an imaginary and has a lost sister".
- There should be a noun of some sort after "imaginary".
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First chapter: 8/10
- At first, I felt a little off reading her introduction, but when we got to her "lost" sister, it was very intriguing. I'd say it was a nice first chapter!
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Grammar/punctuation: 9/10
- Overall, nice job!
You got a little bit of a typing mistake in the beginning of chapter 5: it's written in Ira's pov, but in a couple of places you wrote "Ira" instead of "I, me".
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Vocabulary: 8/10
- I think your vocabulary is nice, and always relative to the subject. Great job, it's a tough one.
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Plot/Pacing: 9/10
- Switching pov's so many times in a single chapter was a bit too much for me. I'd advise you to stick to one or two.
- I was waiting anxiously for any mention of her imaginary love, and dang it was so good. I loved the idea around him.
- I like that you didn't let go of the fact that Brandon had seemed fishy, but instead you mentioned the pills he was taking and linked it to the plot. Nice!
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Characters/character development: 8/10
- I think it was nice connecting with the characters, with each of them getting some little bit of spotlight so that we can get to know them. I feel it can be a tad better if you include more of their reactions, even if just briefly.
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Originality: 8/10
- I found the whole thing original so far, and I hope you continue down that path.
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World building: 8/10
- You story is based in the real world, but you managed to give it a twist and make it your own.
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Imagery: 8/10
- In some places, imagining everything was pretty smooth! But in others, I feel as if maybe you should work a little more on setting the scenes.
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Overall: I'm curious to see what happens next tbh, and keep going xx.
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