The REALM OF CRITIQUES

Burning Midnight

Author: bookideas

Cover:
At first glance I thought the hands were a set of female legs. The cover's dark, but it does have a professional vibe to it. It might've taken me a second to see things correctly, but I was looking at a small thumbnail version on my phone.

Blurb:
It's "keeping" their distance from other people. Fix that.
Beyond this error I'd say it's a captivating, decent blurb. The story sounds similar to The Giver, Hunger Games and Divergent. It's a somewhat overused plot right now, but that doesn't mean you can't make another one.

First Chapter:
I started off with a high level of skepticism. I waited for you to switch tenses or go into Willow's POV, but you stayed consistent. After a bit, I realised I hadn't run into many grammatical concerns either, other than the obvious typo I tagged for you. It was only one, so no biggie.
Then you went into the past, showing us Ivy's background information. I thought it might turn into an info dump, but you got back to the present fairly quickly, impressive. I finished the chapter with one bit of advice to give you. You could add more sensory details. Talk about how things smell, how the leaves scratched against her skin, anything like that. You did this to an extent, but it could be improved. This is an excellent start, and to be honest, after you put this through your editing phase it could be a great book.