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Jack of All Trades
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The Final Verdict
Spelling and Grammar (5): 4.2
Character Portrayals and Story Canon (15) 12.3
Writing [Dialogue, description, etc] (20) 19
Plot (30) 26.7
Fan Votes [should be the same for every judge] (10) 9.3
Judges Vote (20) 19.7
Total: 91.2
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Individual Judges' Votes and Comments
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Spelling and Grammar (5): 5
Character Portrayals and Story Canon (15) 10
Writing [Dialogue, description, etc] (20) 17
Plot (30) 25
Fan Votes [should be the same for every judge] (10) 9.3
Judges Vote (20) 20
Total: 86.3
Additional Comments: This started off great! Love the chocobos and the whole environment you created. Not going to lie though, I kinda thought it was a bit dry in places simply because there was so much detail about everything (which is better than too little detail, but still...I kinda wanted to skip ahead in places to see some action xD). This was very well written and I really get the sense that you have your own writing style and pace that’s very easy to read and understand. The only thing that I really have to say about it is that I’m looking forward to the next part, because I want to see some other characters and some more action. The only taste of plot you gave us was at the very end, you know? But still, loved the use of Chocobos, love the idea, and the world you’ve created so far, and can’t wait to see more.
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Spelling and Grammar (5): 3.5
Character Portrayals and Story Canon (15): 13
Writing [Dialogue, description, etc] (20): 20
Plot (30): 29
Fan Votes [should be the same for every judge] (10): 9.3
Judges Vote (20): 20
Total: 94.8
Additional Comments: THE CHOCOBOS WERE ADORABLE. I loved this, because the relationships you built for the characters were so fun and enjoyable, and I already want to see more. This seems so cute and all, and (Name’s) such a dear (what am I, from the 80’s?) with her fussing over the PHS. xD Bottom line, I want more. Keep going. (x But also watch out for some grammatical things. “Heirloom” has a silent “h,” so it’s technically a vowelly word, so it should be “an heirloom” instead of “a heirloom.” Also, you put “chicobo” in there somewhere. Just make sure to proofread, okay?
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'Best KH/FF/Others Story' Competition Judgment Book
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