'Best KH/FF/Others Story' Competition Judgment Book

Round One: "The Circle" By Pworsh

(This is the first of the individual results. As soon as all the individual results are in, we will let you know who is still in, and who has been turned into a Dusk.)

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The Circle

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The Final Verdict

Spelling and Grammar (5): 4.3
Character Portrayals and Story Canon (15) 9.8
Writing [Dialogue, description, etc] (20) 18
Plot (30) 27.3
Fan Votes [should be the same for every judge] (10) 8.7
Judges Vote (20) 16.1
Total: 84.2

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Individual judges votes and comments

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Spelling and Grammar (5): 5
Character Portrayals and Story Canon (15): 9
Writing [Dialogue, description, etc] (20) : 20
Plot (30): 30
Fan Votes [should be the same for every judge] (10) 8.7
Judges Vote (20): 15
Total: 87.7

Additional Comments: A good start, but I’m a little sad there were no other characters in there yet. I know that they are being worked up to, but still. I really wanted a story focused on the KH/FF people, and while it will be soon I’m sure, it isn’t yet so I’m a bit dissatisfied. But still, I can see where the plot is headed, and I’m excited to see where you take it from here. There were a few spelling and grammar mistakes, but not enough to disrupt from the story from me personally. While I wish there were more characters, so that there could be more points in the character/canon section, but you started us off with a good (Name) protagonist that seems interesting and likable.  

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Spelling and Grammar (5): 4
Character Portrayals and Story Canon (15): 10
Writing [Dialogue, description, etc] (20): 20
Plot (30): 27
Fan Votes [should be the same for every judge] (10): 8.7
Judges Vote (20): 17
Total: 86.7

Additional Comments: I like how the plot was set up so far, and it was a start that caught my attention. I was kind of looking forward to seeing some of the canon characters in the beginning, though, and even though I know that they’ll be there eventually, I was a bit disappointed. Grammar and spelling were both pretty good, but there were some places that needed a little editing due to the improper use of a word and such. I really like how you made (Name)’s character easy for us to see from the start, but she was a bit unrelatable.

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