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The Final Verdict
Spelling and Grammar (5): 4.3
Character Portrayals and Story Canon (15): 10.8
Writing [Dialogue, description, etc.] (20): 14
Plot (30): 21.5
Fan Votes (10): ??? (See there are none. I have no idea what Adree did, but I thought it might just be best to leave this blank and calculate a percentage without the fan votes included)
Judges Vote (20): 11.3
Total: 61.9/90= 68.8%
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Spelling and Grammar (5): 5
Character Portrayals and Story Canon (15): 12
Writing [Dialogue, description, etc.] (20): 17
Plot (30): 20
Fan Votes (10): ???
Judges Vote (20): 15
Total: 72/90= 80%
Additional Comments: Well, I didn't notice anything grammatically wrong that distracted enough from the story for me to take any points off, so kudos to you! But for some reason I can't help but think 'they know her dad's first and last name, and they know her name? Some master thief.' Also I think you meant 'rent', not 'taxes' when describing the shabby apartment/room...and if [Name] was 10 in the first chappy, and it's now 13 years later, she'd be 23, not 19. Nothing major, just some...I donno, plot holes/inaccuracies to look out for. Let's just go down the list then, I took off from characters and canon because while you did have lot's of characters from lot's of things, I really just wanna see some of my KH/FF characters, you know? I mean you mentioned Auron, Yunalesca, and Braska, but we only see non-FF/KH character. I realize that this competition allows for the /others bracket too, so that's why you still scored high, but I really do wanna see some more traditional KH/FF characters from you (after all, this is a KH/FF story competition). Some points were taken off writing for just some awkward phrasing that popped up every now and again, like right now I'm looking at page 2 and "Her exclusively, while a hundred others around the city did the same thing, or worse." I'm sorry, what? xD You got points off plot because I know you have something planned and bubbling under the surface....but so far, nothing has happened really, you know?
Then as far as the judges vote, I'm not going to lie to you, I want to like this more than I actually do. I've been anticipating all the things that could possibly happen in the story and was actually really excited to read your update...but then nothing happened. I guess I'm just a little frustrated because this could be really reaaaaaaaly cool, but so it's just been a pretty angsty [Name] sitting around.
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Spelling and Grammar (5): 4
Character Portrayals and Story Canon (15): 12
Writing [Dialogue, description, etc.] (20): 14
Plot (30): 25
Fan Votes (10): ???
Judges Vote (20): 10
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'Best KH/FF/Others Story' Competition Judgment Book
FanfictionWhere all results, feedback, comments, judges input, and scores will be posted. If you're in this competition, this book is your lifeline. It's how you can connect with the judges, the other writers, and the other stories.
