Reviewer: TheBookishNerd_
Author: Kattyfish03
Book name : Inception of doom
Title//Titre :9/10
The title is eye-catching and different.
Cover/Couverture: 9/10
The cover matches to the plot of the story but aesthetically I found it good.
Blurb/La Description : 9/10
The blurb was intriguing. It did give an insight into the story perfectly.
Storyline/Scénario : 10 /10
Frankly saying the storyline is really good. Although at first, it seems that it's a usual mafia bad boy and a good yet fierce girl story but as I read it I found the storyline different. It's the dark as the blurb and tags promise. I was definitely surprised when Blake let her go and doesn't follow her when he gives her freedom.
Dialogue/Expression: 8/10
You have done really well in this aspect. You have taken full advantage of writing in the first person. You have describe the emotional turmoil of every character beautifully.
Creativity/originality(La créativité/Originalité) : 8/10
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Overall engagement/Engagement global :8 /10
Grammar/Grammaire :9/10
You have written the story in the present tense and you followed it well except in a few places. You have used the past tense. You need to proofread these things once. There are not very major grammatical spelling mistakes. A normal reader would not find any difficulty. But if strive for total perfection, then you can go for editors or simply grammatical and editing apps.
Characters/Personnages : 8/10
The characters are well presented. I just suggest you put up which character POV you are writing. You have done this in very few instances only. It's very confusing to understand the story and situation then.
Flow/Couler : 7/10
I felt the start of the story was a bit rushed. Although later the story got its right pace with everything.
I would suggest adding something or a few scenes before Melissa and Ella get kidnapped. The flow of the story after the abduction is smooth. May be few more interaction scenes between Blake and Mel and Ella would do.
Total:- 85/100
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