Book name: Parents- the seen God
Author: Kaira_reader3104
Reviewer: girly_blush
Review:
Title:(Titre)
A title should be always short and catchy. Here, it did the same thing. The title suited the storyline well. It said everything about the plot.
Cover:(couverture)
No, the cover wasn't attractive. It just had a picture. Even the fonts used weren't anything appealing or charming. You could have worked hard for a cover.
Blurb:(la description)
The blurb gave a little indication of the plot. But it wasn't inquisitive enough. You could have quoted something in the blurb. That would have made the blurb more innovative and interesting.
Storyline:(scènario)
The story was a one shot. More than fan fiction, I felt like I was reading Grandma stories. It passed a message which this generation should know. The storyline was uncommon and interesting. In the story, Kartik and Naira were Grandparents, and their son, Kairav misunderstood them because of his wife, Shruti. Shruti doesn't like Kartik and Naira. But at last, in the end, the story gave us a happy ending. I liked the plot personally. It was a heart-touching one.
Characters:(personnages)
The characters weren't introduced well. Yes, you have given an impression of Kairav and Shruti. But Kartik's and Naira's were missing. The emotions weren't craved appreciatively. Try to explain each event and scenarios instead of writing it in the bracket. That would help. The narration wasn't good.
Flow:( Couler)
The flow broke throughout the story. The way how you used Italic fonts frequently for the past events wasn't nice. Also, the conversation wasn't good. Your story was a mixture of English and Hindi(Hinglish). The story was in short form(including names). So, it all affected the flow of the story.
Grammar: (grammaire)
There were some punctuational errors. You should proofread before updating. Also, try to give English translation for the Hindi dialogues.
The dialogues weren't written and described well. You have wwrittenthe conversation like a mess. It wasn't neat or clean. You should provide gape after writing a dialogue.
There are two types of writing formats. Yours was dialogue format. From the next story onwards, try to correct yourself.
What you wrote;
K- Naira, tum teek ho?
The correct format;
K: Naira, tum teek ho?
Review's opinion: ( critique)
As I said earlier, I liked the plot personally. It gave a good message. But, your narration wasn't good. Try to improve it. Change the book's cover along with the blurb. Also, give the English translation. Try to write the story neatly and attractively. That's all.
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