Reviewer: maha_manan1108
Author: mostlysane1817
Book name: His forceful wife
Title(6/10): Title is good but when I read the story I could not match the plot and the title.
Cover(6/10): Cover is the main thing that attracts readers to the story. Your cover is nice and simple, but it could have been more relatable to the story.
Blurb(10/10): Blurb is short and perfect for the story, which is explained well and increases the curiosity of the readers. You have done a good job on it.
Plot and flow(12/20): The plot you have thought is nice. But when I read the story till the end, I felt the plot is not up to the level. The title and description say different things but when I got inside, the flow completely differs to them. The flow is very fast and there is not many narrations or dialogues. The main leads could have had more dialogues and feels, even for the second leads. I personally felt the story went too fast. Lastly in some places the lines are left in middle.
Dialogue and Expression(6/10: Narration and dialogue are good but they could have been long and more expressive. I feel the emotions that shown are less.
Grammar, spelling and typos(7/10): There are typos and grammatical mistakes between lines, which change the meaning of the statement. It would have been nice if you checked them once again before publishing the chapter.
Creativity(6/10): To be honest I was excited to read the story. I love your creativity but it could have been better with more twists and turns. I felt the plot went a bit flat. Not up to the mark according to me.
Overall appeal(12/20: I have a few points to say about your story. First, the plot you have chosen is nice, a forceful wife. But in the second chapter only, I see Avni become close to Neil. He forced her to marry him so, you should have shown her angry side, or his rudeness towards her. I was expecting it, but it was less as he had a hidden motive to marry her. So, to hide it, he could have acted rudely for more time. And there could have been more narration. As a single chapter, it goes too fast to catch up the flow. And many scenes are not described well like bro-sis bonding between Neil and Nandini, friendship scenes between Manik and Neil. I felt it is lacking there. So, please look after these points. I would suggest you to read your chapters as a reader not a a writer. It would probably will help you to find the mistakes. Overall, it's a nice plot, just take care of the points I have mentioned.
Keep it up!!
Total: 58/100
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