Book name: LovE FoR YoU - PlaNneD ToMake YoU mInE
Auther : Dipanwita86
Reviewer : Charmed_Sunshine_22
Title(Titre): 2 /10
The name of the book is not pulling me into reading it as the title is too long as well as very common. You could use synonyms for the title, like for example,"My prospective love/bride" or "Yearning for you". The title should be written with the first alphabetic character in capital
letters and the rest are written in small letters, the same thing goes for the titles of all the chapters as they are more readable like that and less disturbing for the eyes. I'm taking 8 points from you, I'm really sorry for that.
Cover(Couverture): 2.5 /10
Okay, I looked at the cover, it has too
many pictures at once and it is very
confusing. The title can be hardly read as well as the author's name and graphic designer's watermark (if someone made it for you) are missing, so I'd suggest that you should visit a graphic designer who has a cover shop to make a beautiful cover for you. For those reasons I'm cutting off 7.5 points from you.
Blurb(La description): 7/10
The first part of the blurb is very
eye-catching. The second part introduces the female protagonist, how her life is as well as the situation of how she becomes their placement bride and gets married to Arnav.What I would have done as I read the
disclaimer part of your story I would add that where you have written this, "Amillionaire who wants to marry his love butgets shocked when he finds out that his bride got exchanged." as well as the rest after that and scrap the introduction of
Khushi as it's better to be used for a
character sketch if you don't have one.I noticed that you have named the prologue of your story as the blurb whichisn't the same as the prologue is a preface of the story where as the blurb is more like
a short summary of your story. I'm taking 3 points from you as the blurb is good but it's gonna be more awesome if you make the changes I've suggested but if you think your story is fine without the changes I suggested then you need not make the changes.
Storyline(Scénario): 10/10
From the prologue itself I can already tell that this story is gonna rock if the storyline is perfectly executed.I'm surprised to read Khushi's accident in the first chapter itself. The story has quite a few elements of mystery which makes the readers' excitement grow as well as want to make sure that Garima and Sheetal regret their behaviour.As the ceremonies before the wedding are proceeding my excitement is growing as I'm waiting to see how you are going to execute Arshi's wedding.
Finally karma is getting to Sheetal and her mom as they definitely deserve a lesson and even Shyam as he is a shameless character. I give 10 of 10 points as this story kept me hooked until the latest chapter you have updated.
Dialogue/Expression(Dialogue/Expression) : 9/10
Sometimes the dialogues between the
characters confuse me as I don't know
who's saying what but the expressions of them are good. For that I'm taking a point from you.
Creativity/Originality(Créativité/Originalité) : 10/10
Okay, I can only say, "wow, how did you come up with such a plot?" I'm really liking this concept and it feels fresh to me as I haven't read anything like this yet.
Grammar(Grammaire): 8.5 /10
Your hold on grammar is good but
sometimes you mix up he and she forms, for example, when it comes to someone they know you use "his father" instead of "her father". Something else I have noticed is that you mix up tenses of past and present. I'm cutting off 1.5 points from you as the mistakes that can be easily corrected.
Characters(Personnages): 9.5 /10
There's no character sketch that would introduce the protagonists and the antagonists, which in my opinion is needed in every story except for one-shots. As of what I got from the story Khushi is very innocent while Garima and Sheetal are cruel and cunning, her father and her
Bua are caring, loving and their happiness lies in Khushi. Arnav is totally mysterious, his love for Khushi is amazing as well as the way he planned to take revenge from Garima and her Sheetal darling is fantastic as these people deserve this.I have no words for Sheetal and Garima except for that they disgust me.Aman is a guy who is trying to do the right thing but messes up sometimes as no character is flawless.
The other characters are interesting too and I would love to read more about them. Until now Khushi's character has evolved quite a bit and I'm liking her a lot but what
kept me a bit confused is that Arnav was behaving like a lovesick puppy who didn't care about marrying her instead of Sheetal but you changed it as your readers requested you too. Sorry butI'm snatching 0.5 points from you.
Flow(Couler): 9.5/10
I felt that the flow of the story in the
beginning was too fast for my liking butnow the pace is good. So I'm taking 0.5 points from you.
Reviewer's opinion(critique):
I'd recommend all the fans of Arnav and Khushi to read this excellent book as it's filled with mystery and some amazing twists.
Total: 68/100
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