My Paradise

My Paradise

4.1K Reads 89 Votes 11 Part Story
Bec:) By Rebecca07 Updated Nov 26, 2010

The perfect paradise, the perfect beach, the perfect forest, the perfect everything. 

This is what lured a late teen girl onto an unheard of island, away from hummanity, little does she know, her 'perfect' island is holding a deep dark secret, and she is apart of it, without even knowing.


thecoffeekid thecoffeekid Jan 30, 2011
hey :))))
                              please check out my story
                              it is not that loong.
                              I love yours by the way !!!!
Rebecca07 Rebecca07 Jan 02, 2011
@SpeedReader11794 thank you for reading and commenitng hope you are enjoying reading!
Rebecca07 Rebecca07 Dec 31, 2010
@taraniamh thankyou so much for reading!!!!! and thank you for commenting!!!!
Rebecca07 Rebecca07 Dec 05, 2010
@Allaince_Love thanks for reading, and thanks for the tips:) i love critiques!! so critque more!!
KhaleesIam KhaleesIam Dec 05, 2010
I like it...well love. You have wonderful description but try useing different words. You used allow and allowing right after the other and sparkle and sprakleing too....not trying to be rude just trying to help. Other than that it was great and I love the cliff hangerr!!!!!!!! :D
Rebecca07 Rebecca07 Dec 02, 2010
                              thank you for reading!!!!@nanakie thanks:) it mixes the both you'll see