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Interesting story.... Proof-read a bit. I was just going to say it moved too fast, but honestly, after a while, it doesn't. Update! It's super interesting! Where is her father though?
Sorry, have to comment on the pic. She doesn't look thirteen. She looks more like a ....hm.... a sixteen year old, maybe eighteen...
Awesome! So far the best! Now for S.M.A.S.H.!
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