This is pretty good so far, crulgirlzrule! (Or do you prefer Ella?)
The jump from the past to the present was really confusing...it took me awhile to figure it out -- I didn't. The only reason I knew was when you wrote it out.
Story Questions:
Where does she live?
Who does she live with?
Other friends?
Why is she a freak? Losing a family member can be devastating.
How did she meet with Sophia?
Have the people at her school no sympathy?
Does she have other family?
Remember; answer these questions throughout th story!
Don't do what Litephoenix did! He answered the questions...in a comment! You are supposed to answer these questions with either flashbacks, memories, dreams, etc.
Continue! I'm positive most people who read your story don't have an account, so they can't Vote, Comment or Fan!!
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