Reviewer- Everythingbibulous
Cover and title:
I love the different shades of purple that were shown on your cover. My first impression of it was some beautiful romantic setting but as I proceeded to look at it more it showed innocent yet it always showed some unknown darkness and pain. Your title had me intrigued immediately and I was itching to see what your story was all about. The scars you healed also helped the message of innocence yet over-looming darkness about it.
Description:
Your description reminds me a bit of how I prefer to write my descriptions. Putting an intriguing quote and leaving it at that is always something that I enjoy. It also will have potential readers curious and wanting to take a closer look at your story. And wow can we just talk about how beautiful the quote you put in was? If I was scrolling through the app and came across your story and read that it would have me clicking on chapter one immediately!
Grammar and punctuation:
Your grammar and punctuation were actually quite good for the most part though I do have a few suggestions to make. First off, I would like to advise you to stop using numbers to describe times and such. Instead, type it out like so "Meet me at my house at six p.m." It just makes it look a bit more professional. And then my other critique would to find other words to substitute for jerk. You can only use a word so many times before it starts becoming repetitive. Some potential words to use instead would be:
vulgar
rough
impolite
insolent
ill-mannered
discourteous
Don't feel pressured to have to use any of those words but I do think that it could help out your story if you changed some of the repetitive words.
Plot:
Your plot was something that I haven't seen on the app so far. It kept me interested and it left me craving more and more. Just make sure that your plot stays stable throughout your story and everything should go perfectly fine for you and your story!
Overall thoughts:
I quite enjoyed your story! It left me gasping at some sentences and swooning at others. You're an incredibly talented writer and I can definitely see you have a bright future in writing if you ever decided to pursue it as a career option. I loved the time and thought that you put into your characters and all of their storylines. I hope you and your writing keeps going as well as it currently is and congrats on ten thousand reads! If you have any other questions please let me know <3
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