The love of his life....could be put in danger.....and because of one man...they shall have to make a dangerous decision...follow Dante and Raven and they embark on the journey of their lives....one that can either make'em or break'em!
I started reading and got a headache. You need to separte with paragraphs. Try writting in word document first then copy and paste to this sight. It has great potential but you just need to slow down and take it bit by bit.
As soon as i started reading i couldnt stop its really good :)
i liked the bits of humor you threw in there, and i agree with ImagineThat, keep writing i cant wait to read more :)
Okay, cool! There's the descriptions I wanted. :) And I thought her reaction was a little more realistic this time. :) I think you're doing really well!!! Keep writing!
Going to read more!
@Dukebenjy thnk you sooooo much for the advice i will deff use that to my advantage i appreciated it very much :)