Dear BeautifulLie,
This is quite the story! It's very interesting, but just watch out for those minor grammar errors.
I liked how you made it suspensful as to why Ariel she had wounds. When you say 'wounds', it was a bit of repetiton, so substitute it with other words.
I'll be posting the link to a site soon enough so you can find other synonyms/antonyms to avoid repetition.
Continue this story! I'm sure there are many readers who want it to continue!
xox, Noname O.o