Title: The Ungodly Usurper
Author: huykage
Reviewer: Caitrw
Title: 4/5
The title is original and one that I have not heard before. The only thing that confused me when it came to the title is why is the main character seen as a Usurper?
Blurb: 5/5
The blurb was excellently written, there is not too much information but not too little as well. The blurb explains what's going on in a way that the readers want to figure out what's going to happen.
Plot/ flow of the story: 15 /20
So far with what is written the plot is consistent where it does not stray and make you wonder where does this information fit in at. As for the flow of the story I feel like more so in the beginning that the chapters flow was rocky as well as seems like it moved too fast. I like the ideas of the cliffhangers however, it seems like the chapter just ended more so.
Character development: 3/5
I feel like there is not much of a character development, the main characters development has been talked about however it seems like we still do not know everything about the main character. As for the other characters I feel like there was not much development with them as well.
Grammar: 5/5
The story's grammar had no mistakes or grammar issues.
Reader enjoyment: 4/5
I really enjoyed this story, the author used details to hook the readers and leave them wanting more. For example with the fight scene.
Total points: 36 /45
Short review:
Overall the story was really intriguing because of the action that takes place. When it comes to the dual Point of Views I did get lost since there was no indication of there being a change in point of view. A suggestion that I can make is before the chapter begins make a note of who point of view the readers are reading. Furthermore, I like that even though the blurb was short it explained what the story was about without giving it away.
Another suggestion I can make is using more detail to explain the characters and scenery. That way the story's pace will slow down a little bit since the flow was a little too fast especially with the cliffhangers. In addition the grammar used has no errors and all fit together. I noticed as well that there was a flashback, these are really important for us readers as we know about a character's past. However, I did not know I was reading a flashback. A suggestion that I can make is possibly making it italicized that way readers can see the distinction.