Book: College Escort
Author: Egwuji
Reviewer: LyseaTales
Presentation:
Starting with the presentation, I'd like to make a remark on your blurb stating that it is quite the definition of an accurate blurb. It is not lengthy or short for that matter. It clicks a sense into the readers wanting them to start reading the book. Second of all, since the first thing that catches a reader's eye is the cover and title, this book fulfills those demands. All three are well coordinated with each other and I wouldn't want to suggest otherwise. When it comes to the chapters, they are extremely wordy which makes them way more exaggerating and dramatic, but that is what your writing style is all about and all that an individual can truly enjoy. The aesthetics too don't need any kind of changes.
Grammar/ Vocabulary:
Your grammar is faithful, raw, and authentic. Like I've claimed earlier about the usage of exaggeration of each and every description, I'd say that you carry on with the same technique of writing considering it makes your book a lot more lively and comprehensible. I feel that the chapters are not entirely drafts or have been written very precisely to spot minor, indistinguishable errors and so, it doesn't require any kind of major change(s).
Character Development:
Too early to comment on the characters but from what I've seen and read so far, I have a feeling that Aaron won't only go but make certain people go through a lot of rough patches. You've displayed the characters really well with a strong, opinionated background and character building.
Plot Development:
Again, too early to comment on the plot. However, the world-building is straightforward and self-explanatory. I'd suggest you continue it that way since it compliments your writing style, accent, and flow of words.
Overview:
As an overview, your book doesn't need to be particularly edited or re-written so far when it comes to grammar, vocabulary, or other terms as such. I'd still suggest you keep the chapters short and sweet so that they don't exceed 1500-2000 words and remain consistent. Also, working a bit on descriptive incidences would give it the final efficient effect or touch you're looking for.