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#221 Blood Sucker

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by xanabanana66x

by xanabanana66x

Blood Sucker by @lovechild777

Commas before names. You generally need more commas.

Good descriptions although sometimes I would have liked more of it to really show the reader the scene. I commented in these places.

Apostrophes of possession.

I'll tag you in a post where I explain how to format dialogue properly to others (although with you it's just some small issues with action.)

That's all! I liked how Mason revealed his true intentions at the end of chapter 2.

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