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#192 Abigrace

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by xanabanana66x

by xanabanana66x

Abigrace by __Carrots__

Most commas were in the right place. Just be aware of the spacing of them.

Don't use fancy words unless absolutely necessary.

I'll tag you in another critique on how to format dialogue correctly.

Very good comparison with Abigail and the paper.

I felt like there was a really big contrast with the way you were using big words and the way Abigail saw things so simply.

American or British spelling - stick to one.

Numbers spelled out look more formal.

I wonder who the narrator is (because you kept referring to them).

Tenses were jumping about (e.g. For the descriptions of Abigail you had it in present, and then for the dialogue you had it in the past.

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