#188 Lover: A Book Of Heartbreaks

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Lover etc by @MmTt11

Certain words and phrases needed to be changed because they either didn't make grammatical sense or there was a better option available. I commented on these so you know where they are.

Bearing that in mind, be careful with prepositions.

Bitter Silence was by far my favourite poem because it was one that I could relate to and also it told a story.

Speaking of that one, maybe change the title? I just don't think it fits the style or the poem. Maybe change it to 'Love Is'. I don't know. Your choice. Or don't change it at all.

Apart from that, all good. :)

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