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#193 Last Light

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Last Light by @MmTt11

Tenses were jumping around - stick to the past. Also had some problems with plurals so keep an eye on that.

You sometimes had unnecessary additional articles.

Commas before names.

I really liked the connection between Apollo and Aunt Jonah.

Great suspense too.

Novel books can just be shortened to novels.

I'll tag you in a critique where I've shown someone else how to format dialogue correctly.

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