knivesxpens,
This story is quite interesting. But I have to mention it, like quite a few authors on Wattpad, you mention a student that falls in love with a teacher. I love the twist with the catholic boarding school, but it moved a bit too fast. When you write numbers, I suggest writing it as an actual word. Example: Bella was making the four used beds... See? It looks nicer. Also most readers base their reading on punctuation. Be careful with punctuation because there are less errors when you proof-read your work. If you do. I do.
Common errors you have: i instead of I. No capitals after a period. Uh... That's it. Oh yeah, and no spaces after a punctuation!
Good punctuation is the first step to a good story! Also, some parts where run-on sentences. Those are confusing and hard to understand. Clarity. Some areas need to be clearer. The very first sentence was unclear, and good first impressions are everything!
Keep going! Nice story!
xox, Noname O.o
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