So, Jamilla,
This was an interesting story, and you should write more! It was a bit choppy, just to say, but you pulled it together with a few transitional paragraphs, and it smoothed out perfectly, completing the story very nicely!
If you could, write a second book, to include why Nikolaus was so rich and why his mother hated Shea so much. And if Nikola would be something big in the Dragovic family.
Keep writing!
Noname O.o
Date: 18 March 2011
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