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Ummmm.... Ehhh..... this was hard to read. There is a lot of dialogue. The character was not taking in surroundings. I was extremely confused by who is who. I read the description and was like... okay, I'm doing a sequel. Then my brain kinda went... poof. I didn't get it. At ALL. Maybe you should rewrite the ENTIRE book, from beginning to end. Write more descriptions on the surroundings, the character's feelings... Do you understand?
I think it would be an interesting story. But you would need to slow it down. And maybe change the title. Like: The Sleepless Nights Of An Insecure Parenthood. But put that as the new title for a new book.
-Less dialogue, or, MORE description.
-Why did you bold the first book? *scratches head in confusion*
-So many chapters!! Too long for me to review. It's hard for the review. You may have to make Book 3.
Hope this helps!!
Noname O.o
Date: 10 August 2011
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