Dear StarryPenguins,
THIS WAS AWESOME! It's so funny, pure entertainment... This should go for the Watty Awards in the Humor category. I was laughing the whole time. I like the title... extremely original!
One thing. Just watch for new words... Look for newer words, and I was pleased to see "cerulean" as a description. But... I had to Google 'cerulean' because I had no idea what color it was! Maybe say something along the lines of... "The blue, light cerulean tinged eyes..." etc., etc. Just mention it's a shade of blue.
Keep writing, it's awesome!
My fav part...
The chapter "Cupcake And Meet And Greet" was awesome, you really could feel you were there! I felt so... into the story! I was dragged in.
Sincerely,
Noname O.o
Date: 11 August 2011
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