Dearest missvampweirdo,
First off, thanks a million for fanning, I smiled a big happy smile when I checked my email. Second, I like the beginning of your story. And only on the first page! Yay!!
Nice, slightly cliche on the black hair/green eyes combo/bad boy look/best friend. It's extremely common... Oh, well. ;)
Written extremely well, though I would hint at it a little bit more at the beginning of the story that Emily is a half-vampy.
Awesome!
Noname O.o
Date: 17 June 2011
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