The One Who Was [ON HOLD]

The One Who Was [ON HOLD]

9 Part Story 999 Reads 48 Votes
Kestrel LeStarre By ADarkAndStormyNight Updated Dec 29, 2012

"That is all that is left of my humanity, Clara. An image with less substance than a ghost."

He seemed to be genuinely upset.

"What are you then?"

"A Tsal."

He said it bitterly, as if it were a painful memory that he'd rather forget.

"A Tsal," he said again, "nothing more than a slave."


Most people think that vampires are ruthless blood-sucking creatures. I thought so too, before I became one. Now I'm not so sure. Now, I'm starting to believe what they tell me about their purpose. This is my life, and First Death. Read on, and know that what I transcribe is the truth as it happened to me.

My name was Clara. Now it is Klarae. Call me either one, I am beyond caring.

@LeeHowgate Thank you, and I know it's really short. I blame Wattpad. xD
CobaltLee CobaltLee Jan 04, 2013 04:28PM
Well written so far- a couple of typos aside.  I would try to make Chapter 1 longer to hook more readers.
@Etcetera Oh. My. God. *faints* ETCETERA just voted for MY story, AND commented nice things. ETCETERA, quite possibly the meanest reviewer of all time. I am probably the happiest person on Earth right now.
Etcetera Etcetera Oct 15, 2012 12:30AM
Oh wow, this was pretty interesting. Although the length of the chapter was very short, I really enjoyed the twist at the end! :D Again, I can't really make a thorough judgement yet because this was so short, but in terms of writing delivery, it was very well done.
@Adicuz If you want me to review it, please go to my Reviewing book- The Ultimate Critique- and post a comment with your request and a link.
@Armiella i prefer irony. She loves vamps, but then she is thrown into a vamp story. She discovers that they're (obviously) not what she thinks and grows to hate them. Irony.