THE RUBY AWARDS | 3RD EDITION | 2020 {OPEN}

Paranormal/ Horror Results

¶10th Place¶

Intimidado by AvyannaTremaine 39/100

~Review~

What does the title mean? How is it relevant to the story? The blurb is a little short and doesn't tell you much about what the plot is about. While it does raise many questions, which is intriguing, I do feel the blurb is missing something.

A lot of grammatical mistakes, causes confusion as to what is being said at times. I would never advise a writer to write in all-caps, but certainly not when your character is actually whispering, that just sends all kinds of confusing messages.

Why would you use exclamation points when something is said with a sigh?The story progresses rather slowly after the first chapter.

After 5 chapters I'm still not sure what the plot of the story is supposed to be. The main character doesn't appear to have a goal, and the sudden tense moments throughout the chapters seem pretty random.

¶9th Place¶

By a Rose by ChiddyE01 44/100

~Review~

The cover does not look very professional. Some grammatical errors in the blurb. Also a little confusing, like for example, what does 'waking up every morn.' mean? Is it supposed to be short for morning? It's written like that in the first chapter as well. Please don't shorten the word morning, it doesn't look professional.

The chapters are on the long side. The use of English is a little strange at times, especially when it comes to expressions (like '...and people meant humans.', and 'spleen clean.').

Misspelled words. The story progresses very slowly. Too much time is wasted describing unimportant actions.

¶8th Place¶

Dead Laughing by Saramitra_ 50/100

~Review~

The cover is a bit average, not terrible but not amazing either. A few minor mistakes in the blurb. A clear premise though. The prologue was pretty underwhelming, and felt a little rushed. Two people meet, and then they become friends, three other people join, and they all become 'family'. And all that happened in about 5 sentences.

It would have helped to make clear in chapter 1 which point of view it was written from, because it caused some confusion. The character's name wasn't mentioned once.

I found it a little confusing that right after translating the dialogue in between brackets, there was also an added explanation of the tone of the sentence, like it was part of the translation.

Use of vocabulary is a bit repetitive. Too much time is spent describing unimportant actions, like going to class, which slows down the pace of the book. The large number of characters causes confusion, I'm having a hard time keeping them apart.