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⇢PLOT HOLES-Soooo this is a fanfiction and to be quite honest I'm not a part of this fandom. I've actually never heard of it.
BUT! You have made me want to become a part of the fandom! (I will forever blame you for this.)
So you wanted me to focus on plot holes.
*inhales* Here we go.
BASICALLY NONE!
You do a really good job at explaining everything!
There are no actual plot holes although some things are a tad confusing. Everything is explained but for things that are only in that fandom, you should explain a tad more. (Some parts are relatable to other fandoms and it's not hard to figure out but other parts are solely in that fandom and are confusing.)
⇢PACE-The pace of the plot goes quite well! Nothing happens too fast and if it does there's an obvious reason! Likewise, there are not many filler scenes and even the filler scenes are important!
⇢HAPPENINGS-(AKA the events)- Everything that you write makes sense! None of the situations is confusing and they are all well thought out.
None of the individual scenes takes away from the plot, they instead, add to it and help it grow and develop.
The happenings are all also very amusing to read! Sometimes they were intense and I had to step away for like half an hour before I could continue because you are JUST THAT GOOD!
*sighs* I love this book.
❥Characters:
⇢DEVELOPMENT- I really love that we see the characters starting traits from the beginning right off the bat! That is a huge help for judging character development!
The characters develop at a decent pace. I feel like the development is too uniform-they all begin to develop around the same time, so it would be nice to have a variety.
It was, however, enjoyable to read!
⇢ROLES- The characters all play extremely crucial roles. None of them is wasted and I love that!
The characters roles are all clearly distinguishable-one is obviously the main character, one is the antagonist like character, etc.
❥Writing Style:
⇢CONSISTENCY- One of the most important parts of the story is the consistency of the language.
This is a really important part because if the style isn't consistent it may become annoying for the reader to have to deal with so many changes so quickly!
While it's fairly evident that throughout the story you've grown as a writer, your writing style has been consistent!
⇢FITTINGNESS TO THE STORY- Some people don't know what I mean so allow to briefly explain.
The writing style must match the story in a way it makes sense. For example, for a mystery you would write ominously with attention to small details, focusing mostly on logic and evidence rather than emotions.
The way you write, the mood, the word choice, the pace and the punctuation all fit the plot!
The happenings (events) are all well polished by your writing. Extremely amazing job!
❥Language:
⇢GRAMMAR/SENTENCE STRUCTURE- You have excellent grammar, which means excellent sentence structure! You have smooth sentences that just flow through my mind and wander off my tongue melodiously.
This is totally optional but you should also use contractions (is that what they're called?) a bit more. For example; 'I do not' to 'I don't' for different characters. Saying each word sounds posher and it's not for everybody!
⇢PUNCTUATION-Pretty good here!
You used exclamation marks, question marks and periods well!
I would just look out for comma splicing and uses of colons or semicolons.
⇢DETAILS- I love all the details you add! There isn't very much prose, but there's enough so you don't just tell the reader but you really show them as well!
⇢TYPOS- Of what I read there were none!
You deserve a good read sticker!
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I am done! ______________
A BIG BIG BIG thank you to this amazing person (hfalcon24482375) who helped us out by doing a complimentary review!❤ You're a gem! 😁 Check out her account sometime!
