The Reader's POV: Review Book {CLOSED}

Common Sense ☆ __Carrots__

Author: ElisabethEadon

Reviewer: __Carrots__

Chapters reviewed: Eight

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o FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

Blurb wise:

It's a very good blurb.

I think that the truth or dare incident that you mentioned in your blurb, and results of that game, and the introduction of the unpleasant aunt, every thing sat together very well.

The writing flow of your blurb too is very good, it gives your book a very pleasant vibe. Every incident is connected to the other one. So that's really good.

Although, the format of it looks like you just puked all your thoughts out.

Your blurb needs paragraph breaks. It looks like one lengthy piece of spontaneous thoughts. But a book blurb should be the complete opposite of it, it should be properly planned and laid out.

I'd suggest you add a paragraph break right before this line; "After a game of Truth or Dare. . ."

And also before this line; "After making a wrong turn and an unlikely friend. . ."

Because both these sentences are introducing a new incident and a new idea, so you must add a paragraph break before you begin a new scene, whether it be in your blurb or in your chapters.

Also, could you separate the author's note that you added at the last part of your blurb? The part where you say this is your first Wattpadd book, yes separate that using a paragraph break and a divider. So that we know that it's you who's talking to the readers.

Title wise:

"Common sense".

While this was a good choice for a title name, I don't see the need of it's existence.

Your book is about Abigail losing herself in the year 1775 with no resources to return to the present year, she has to rely on strangers and very limited reliable information, because as we know Abigail despises History and knows nothing.

A book with such a story line, could have such an amazing and creative title. Work on it. 😉

Cover wise: